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PostSubject: Mami Mami no mi    Mon Sep 04, 2017 12:55 pm

Mami Mami no mi ; Model: Kachiyama
The fruit's idea is based off of a Japanese folk where a Mami (Fox) condescending and conniving, kills the person who saves him, then boils the person in a stew and makes her husband eat it. However, he is met with a gruesome end.

Type- Mythical Zoan

Appearance- The user transforms into a dark grey furred fox, with silver tufts of hair, and black eyes. The user's nails grow exceptionally large and have a dark red color. The user's paws are covered with flames.

Operation- The user is able to ignite a fire capable of boiling a human body in a near vicinity. He is, however, not able to control them after ignition. The user gains extreme speed and physical power and resilience. The user's paws are highly capable and efficient to scale mountains. An interesting concept could be ability to manifest people's hatred and anger into his power.


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PostSubject: Re: Mami Mami no mi    Thu Sep 07, 2017 10:57 am

While I like the idea of using folkfore into abilities and the like, would like to ask to make some edits to make the text more readable, as well as recommend to create a single form (whatever you want the user to become).

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PostSubject: Re: Mami Mami no mi    Fri Sep 08, 2017 4:02 am

Any specific tips for making the text readable? I'm not sure I understand.
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PostSubject: Re: Mami Mami no mi    Fri Sep 08, 2017 7:21 am

I'm just going to edit the post to make it more appealing to the eye. Nothing else. But, would still prefer for the ability to become more clear-cut. Maybe a single form, and the ability being more compact. As in, for example:

-The user becomes an X creature. Aside of X creature's natural powers, the user can also do Y action (which matches the folk tale or mythical creature's power).

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PostSubject: Re: Mami Mami no mi    Sat Sep 23, 2017 11:55 pm

The fruit is much better.  Just as a note, we don't really have a system in place to messure "strength" so turning rage and hatred into power would be cosmetic.  Strength and power in the forum is largly dependant and activity and time on the site.


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