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PostSubject: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Sun Nov 24, 2013 9:15 pm

Name : Cadis D. Lionheart

NickName: Black Lion

Age:25

Bounty:1,000,000

Species: Human

Occupation: Shipwright

Allegiance: Blizzard Pirates

Home Village/Ocean: New World
Appearance: Using the Black Lion Armor, Cadis's physical strength is vastly increased and he is able to use the armor to attack targets. When the curse armor was freed, he trained himself in the use of Zocato, an ancient power used by the clan. With the power of Zocato, Cadis's power increased.

Cadis †is extremely, extremely handsome very tall most inexplicably elegant and youthful looking (catching eyes of everyone, especially females). He has scarlet-red eyes (a common trait among pure-blooded Human) and jet black hair. He is usually seen wearing the an High School uniform. He has a silver cross earring on his left ear which is later revealed to be a gift from the previous Master. He also wears an outfit that bears a strong resemblance to his uniform (albeit without the emblem). †His demeanor is stoic and regal and his appearance inspires unimaginable awe and respect as well as his talents and unbeatable power, though his composure is sometimes broken by his confusion and ineptitude in understanding and utilizing the technology found at modern time. Six feet even ,and 250 pounds.


History:The Finding/Power/Trade:


This Armor is not known by many as the Black Lion Armor; by most it is known by the name Curse Armor, because of this armors unique history. It was said to be created thousands of years ago when devil fruits were first discovered by a man who had been betrayed by his father, mother, friends, country, siblings, mentor, and even his children. The legend says that he took the hearts of 9 pure virgins and used the blood to coat a formerly solid gold armor for royals. He then tempered it with various black minerals, some of which they believe was kairoseki, but more than likely there wasn't enough to affect the armor. He then made a deal with the devil and removed his own heart to create an armor as black as it that would absorb and consume all that would stop his revenge. He killed his entire family, and eventually the entire country. Then he learned that they were doing what was best for him. As he bled out, he watched as a new military took over the country. The leader stripped him of his armor and told him that he was a talked for assassination. In his last breath, the cursed man cursed his armor that all who should use it would suffer the true pains of the purists despair. History aside from the legend is scarce; however, each story describes a bitter-sweet tail where one who needed the armor succeeded only to fall into the worst kind of despair.



Cadis, Lionheart was born in raise by an unknown clan called the claw clan †he didnít know his parents this clan trained the young boys in many animal ways to martial arts as well as females. Cadis above his teaching with the combat uses of the Black lion that was not enough. In fact he had to unlock great power going for the ancient armor known as Black Lion Armor using his vast knowledge of this power he unlock this armor ,and learn the power of Zocato.
Mastering his technique he attempt to set off in a new life one where he can earn fame, and spread his power against the weak and strong. In fact after a couple years he pick up the skill which allow him to become a shipwright even those he donít like this trade he need it to travel thus for why he taken it up as his own.

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Due to his great power his ancient armor over power his foes as he went on a killing spread he care for so little even this Yonko learn of his power which he ask him to work for him. †At first he didnít acknowledge the Yonko power but after a short battle he submits. Therefore he now travels with the blizzard pirates out of the respect of the Yonko high rank, and powers as a devil fruit user.
He bounty slowly increase due to his conflict ,and the aid he help the yonko attacking several cityís raiding ,and killing many people for the hell of it. Finally reaching a level that was worthy of †a pirate even those he donít consider himself one he is a brute ,and a killer with no cause but for only for power itself.


Personality: Cadis is a being of pure evil. He is cold, manipulative and extremely ruthless. When he was first released from the chest that sealed, his armor .Despite this, Cadis †had told himself †that this armor would destroy him and all humans once he recovered his true power.
Due to his powerful will, Cadis managed to fully control armor. However, it was later shown that Cadis's human nature was beginning to influence armor, as seen when armor had shown compassion for his crew members.


Ship:Stormbringer

Ship Flag: it's a frozen skull with swords crossed behind it and snowflakes surrounding it

Devil Fruit: Limited to only three devil fruit users per person
Type: (only if you have a devil fruit)
Effect: (only if you have a devil fruit)

Special Abilities:
** Average Strength: Due to this armor which is heavy due to the many years wearing it he can now use it with ease ,and the strengths which allow him to shake the ground with one single fist or kick.

Black Armor: This armor has been given the yami yami no mi, and has been set to activate the ability when damaging effect come in contact with the outside of the armor. The yami yami no mi effects absorb all energy-type damage such as fire and electricity, but it has no ability to absorb water by the nature of devilfruits. Major cutting-based dangers that come in contact will be absorb like energy; however, since it isn't energy it will be far less effective, only reducing the damage by half. This set up seems to be perfect, but it actually isn't; major impact damage will be absorbed by the armor which will be tripled in effect and distribute throughout the entire body. This makes large impacts a weakness for the user of this armor. Kairoseki will neutralize this armor's devil friit abilities. The armor is also very very dense, an upward of 200kg, making it slow down and hinder most who wear it; only the strongest men and women can move quickly in this armor.



Learned Techniques (Keep it 1-25):
Black Claw :He open hand thrust his hand attacking his target making it have the appearance of a lion claw. The strenght of this claw if rival to shigan instead it requries more then one fingers those.

Lion Quake fist: He release several punches or kick at the air or at a target with each punch they release a black wind wave or shockwave.
Weather it is an shockwave or wind wave each attack cause the same damage .Meaning the wind wave
is like a wind slash that cut you up and the shockwave cause you short muscle failed for 1 post.

Black Armor Fist: The user begin to direct the attack of the engery he abosorb into a black aura which he fire back at the target with great power.
Along with speed the attack take the appearance of a black lion or something to that level.

Shockwave Roar: The user let loose a lound roar one that created shockwaves used to scare a target or cause the target to fly back due to the force of the shockwave. This attack cover 40 feet in all direction.

Black Lion Pounce: The user spread his legs as he jump as fast
as a lion, and run as far he even fight like a lion but using his legs ,and feet he do several high kicks, and punches at the target upper ,and lower body. The user fight in the true despair of his armor

Tranform :The user can got between his black lion armor,and normal human appearance with ease. He up to the point where he can summon single part of his armor too.

Zocato: He can in power himself increase his speed for up to 5 post increase everything he does times five making him very powerful, and fast. When he used this he canít use Zocato no more that battle he would be very tired after it too. †Zocato can also be used to send powerful shockwaves, and pressure then target to fall down on his kneeís for one post when he used this power period both effect are active.


Weapons/Items: Black Lion Armor: This armor is enchanted giving the human who wear this great power in speed, and strengths.

Character Flaws :He is an brute, and a breasker attacking without tactic but attacking with pure power. To overwhelm his targets he try to.

Goals: To reach the general level of his clan[/b]


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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Mon Nov 25, 2013 7:14 am

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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Tue Nov 26, 2013 1:25 pm

This armor needs to go as a separate weapon and the way in which it is "enchanted" needs to be discussed... Cause it's not allowed in the site to have stuffed like buffs from objects. The appearance also needs to be more detailed... you are not saying how he looks like at all. The only thing related to appearance there is that he wears an armor.

(BTW, my yonkou is not a devil fruit user)

Lion Fist: How does he cover his fist in this energy? Where does it come from?

You're going to need to put some work into this character to make it acceptable.

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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Tue Nov 26, 2013 8:22 pm

Black Lion Armor: This armor is enchanted giving the human who wear this great power in speed, and strengths.

You've never posted in the weapons section. Now is a good time to do it... and with that armor.

Transform: He turns from his human from into Dai shi armor mode which his strengths and power increase tenfold. His armor can take damage that of several energy basic attacks that of major level (devil fruit user). He can summon this armor at will then return back to his human stage.

Zocato: He can in power himself increase his speed for up to 5 post increase everything he does times five making him very powerful, and fast. When he used this he canít use Zocato no more that battle he would be very tired after it too. †Zocato can also be used to send powerful shockwaves, and pressure then target to fall down on his kneeís for one post when he used this power period both effect are active.


So he has super speed (Above an average soru user?!), the strength to shake the ground, borderline iffy reflexes for a starter character, and all of this can be increased by.. let's see, the power is increased by tenfold at first (so x10?) and then multiplied by five (along with everything else). And on top of this, along with no serious side effect other then feeling a little tired from using Zocato, he gets to stop devil fruit abilities that are energy related? (Like fire, lighting, light, darkness, shock-wave related techniques, wind slashes, overall lazer beam related DF's). Too many power ups without serious consequences (and the power-ups are too overpowered). I'm going to let you fix these yourself, give them limitations that you think will make them acceptable. And I mean REAL limitations, not added cool-downs (although those wouldn't hurt), and try to either lose one of these power-ups or make them less... strong.

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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Mon Dec 02, 2013 10:57 pm

you have not made any changes to the issues crow as addressed anfer. this character has far too many advantages, if you want the armor, ill accept above average strength but not super strength and no way in hell does he get super speed with that kind of armor.
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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Tue Dec 03, 2013 5:55 am

Nikz:you have not made any changes to the issues crow as addressed anfer. this character has far too many advantages, if you want the armor, ill accept above average strength but not super strength and no way in hell does he get super speed with that kind of armor.

Boost have been nerf to 5 times only. I remove tenfold since you miss understood me.
I made strenght average like you requested.
I remove super speed.
I add 2 more attacks.

Review please
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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Tue Dec 03, 2013 6:59 pm

DarkHole: The user begin to used the armor hidden power to attempt to make the gravity around him very hard. Using this skill the armor slightly release the despair it hold due to the many people that was killed to make this armor. The armor begin to pull anything toward it way within 50 feet this include engery base attacks to.

The armor doesn't have the ability to pull people towards it, only absorb energy attacks. This technique needs to be removed, or you need to make a new technique. My advise would be something your character can do without the assistance of the armor, in the off chance he's every dragged into jail and forced to attempt to escape without it (since I know you'll plan this eventually).

As for your appearance, listen to Rodo and.. put an appearance. I don't want to hear about the armor's history or its abilitites, I want to hear about how your character looks like. Example, judging by what you wrote I am assuming under the armor he is a purple elephant with warts and jellybeans as eyeballs. His hair is as colorful as his skittle infused tongue. Oh yes, and he's obese.. even for an elephant, did I mention he's short? Like 4'11. SeewhatIdidthere? I need to know how he looks like.

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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Wed Dec 04, 2013 6:47 am

Done sir.
I remove, and edit all things you requested sir.
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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Wed Dec 04, 2013 5:03 pm

Add height and weight to the profile, and I'll approve this.

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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Wed Dec 04, 2013 9:07 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Cadis D. Lionheart(Approve)   Wed Dec 04, 2013 9:20 pm

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