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PostSubject: Psycho Pirates Captain Aravin.D.Sivasailam   Fri Dec 07, 2012 10:17 am

Name: Aravin. D. Sivasailam, Psychopath

Age: 21

Bounty: 10,000,000 Beli

Species: Human

Occupation: Story writer

Allegiance: Pirate

Home Village/Ocean: North Blue

Appearance: Identified by a X cut along the right side of the cheek, little large front teeth and a goatee.

History: Long lost relative to the “D” family with a mysterious past and could carry the will of D

Personality: Selfish, stubborn, short tempered and humorous

Ship: Slice of Life

Ship Flag: Skull with three knives entered from above the head

Devil Fruit: Shabaru Shabaru
type: Logia
effect: suck blood as a liquid from any part of the opponent and render him completely dead

Special Abilities: Sovereign Haki expert

Learned Techniques (Keep it 1-25): Fast swordsman

Weapons/Items: Katana named “shi no negai”

Goals: To help Luffy find One Piece, marry Nico Robin
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PostSubject: Re: Psycho Pirates Captain Aravin.D.Sivasailam   Fri Dec 07, 2012 10:44 am

Okay where do I start.

One the personality is far too short...As is the appearance and history. That "mystery that nobody knows." thing doesn't fly here and details are needed. Two Haki is banned from the site so you can't have it. Three your fruit is too op and not in the right fruit type. Four Fast swordsman is in the wrong area and too vague and finally. Five, Luffy and Robin do not exist in this universe this is an AU rp which means. No Luffy, No Robin, No Zoro, No anyone all completely original characters.

As of now this app is denied.
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